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Quietly Drowning

Post by Trobador222 » Mon Apr 19, 2021 10:33 pm

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Re: Quietly Drowning

Post by Ashley » Tue Apr 20, 2021 9:30 am

Wow I like this a lot, I really like the arpy sounds too, well done!!
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Re: Quietly Drowning

Post by Citizen Dolly » Tue Apr 20, 2021 5:15 pm

I've got mixed feelings about the bassline on this - kind of like it but it seems like its a bit too much, too repetitive. Could maybe benefit from thinning it out a little, so instead of a continuous 4 bar loop, maybe stretch it to 8 bars, with the first two bars repeating 3 times, and the stepped bit being the 7th and 8th bars if you see what I mean...? I think that'd introduce a little tension and ease the repetitiveness. I don't know if you're trying for ambient here, but it seems to me that there's too much going on over too short a space of time. I know I'm one to lecture on this cos I can't do sparse or minimalist arrangements to save my life, but that seems to be the general rule for ambient as I understand it. At any rate, I dig the piano in the second part. :bueno:
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Re: Quietly Drowning

Post by Trobador222 » Tue Apr 20, 2021 5:31 pm

I don't know if it's Ambient or not. Maybe Downtempo would be a better descriptor?

Yeah point taken on the bass part. I should have have changed it up sooner than I did.Thanks for the listen!

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Re: Quietly Drowning

Post by Mr. Marty » Tue Apr 20, 2021 9:22 pm

Nice! I do like the openess of it. Clear clean too. Well done

Ditto on what Neil said about the bass. Gets distracting after the third rep. Might try moving up to 5th or 7th notes on the 3 and 4th bars. Or, have some other instrument play the 5th and 7th and knock the bass back a few db on those notes or better yet move down scale. Might be interesting with other instument moving up scale on the 5ths and 7ths. At least do something different in the sparse spaces.
I do like the piano in the later part it adds tension (with the repetitiveness oddly enough).

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Re: Quietly Drowning

Post by Mr. Marty » Tue Apr 20, 2021 9:34 pm

hmm enjoyed playing along with thi one
try ending the bass run with a C#, adds a 7th to the A chord
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Re: Quietly Drowning

Post by DollarBill » Sun May 09, 2021 9:49 pm

Groovy and a little surreal

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Re: Quietly Drowning

Post by Heigen5 » Mon May 10, 2021 8:27 pm

Nice vibe it has and cool lazerish synths. The bass-synth works well. Nice pianos later on. Very nice!

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